If I had to define myself right now, I’d say that I’m a professional reader/reviewer. This year I’m trying to read everything I start from cover to cover (insider secret: you really only need to read about half to write a good review), and so far I’ve set a pretty good pace. If you count audiobooks, I’ve already burned through seven novels.
Almost a book a week.
I’ve read old books. I’ve read new books. I’ve read books that haven’t even hit the market yet. Some of them were written by long established, prolific novelists at the end of their careers. And some of them are self-published novels from writers who are just getting started. Because of the breadth of my reading I pick up on things. What makes a book worth reading? What will help it stand the test of time? And where do new writers struggle?
New writers: this is for you.
I’m not going to single anyone out, nor is this directed at anyone in particular. If you know I have or am reading your book I hope you won’t take anything I say personally, because that’s not my intention. As a fiction writer myself these are things I need to keep in mind as much anyone, and Lord knows I’m guilty of every storytelling sin I’m about to share.
Punctuation Errors
There’s nothing worse than reading a novel that wasn’t giving a thorough going over by a copy editor. Storytellers are for story. Editors are for making it readable. It’s okay if you can’t remember the difference between “it’s” and “its,” and if you have someone in your life who does, the world need never know. But I can’t tell you how many self-published books I’ve read where that mistake and others don’t happen once or twice, but consistently. If you want to be taken seriously, your book must be produced professionally. And I don’t mean by a publishing house with an awesome cover.
Present Tense vs. Past Tense
Very, very, very, (very) rarely should a book be written in present tense. Screenwriters write in present tense. Novelists generally should not. I’ve read some excellent novels that were all the more engrossing because I was led to experience the action as it happened, but generally speaking it’s the sign of a writer who doesn’t know what he or she is doing. Again, hold yourself to the standard of the mainstream. The standard is past tense. Maybe someday you can explore other approaches, but starting out you and your readers will be best served by keeping the writing unnoticeable. Whatever you decide to do, pick one and make sure you stick to it.
Writing Writerly
This ties into my previous point. Your narrative voice should be nearly invisible. If your writing sounds like writing, rewrite it. As Robert McKee says, “If your characters are talking about what they’re talking about, you’re in deep shit.” If the sentences and dialog read like writing, you’re in just as much trouble. Readers want a natural sounding novel. Just because the story is important doesn’t mean it should sound important, otherwise you risk talking down to your readers or drawing attention away from the story. The only exception is when writing humor, where the narrator is also a character, albeit one working from outside the story.
Bad Examples
Metaphor and simile are important tools in the writer’s kit and should be used carefully. If your story is written in a pre-industrial fantasyland don’t have your villain’s army “charging like a locomotive through a herd of buffalo grazing on the tracks,” unless locomotives exist in your world. And buffalo. We want to be immersed in your world, not suddenly picturing things from our own.
Don’t Be Discouraged
Maybe you see yourself here and are thinking of that book you just shared with the world. There’s no taking it back now for correction. That’s okay. The personal connections self-published writers make mean the audience is more forgiving and understanding when they see an error. Writing isn’t just the process of creating a single novel, but a lifelong pursuit to tell better stories in better ways. We can’t sit around and wait for perfection. It will never come anyway. All we can do is hope for grace, keep going, and do better next time.